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Subject: Re: [emergency] NOAA Letter and meeting today a 3:00 EDT
Good suggestions, I will incorporate into the draft. Elysa
At 11:45 AM 6/16/2006, Rex Brooks wrote:
>Thanks Elysa,
>
>I am available today for the call.
>
>I think the first paragraph is a bit disjointed.
>I think the second sentence should not be one
>long sentence, but two shorter ones. Also the
>last sentence does not seem to belong with the
>paragraph's overall thought and sounds like
>something I would expect the addressee (along
>with whomever else we are addressing by
>implication) to know. I think it should be a
>separate short paragraph. I suggest:
>
>I am writing on behalf of the Emergency
>Management Technical Committee (EMTC) of the
>Organization for the Advancement of Structured
>Information Standards (OASIS). We would like to
>commend your staff for utilizing the Common
>Alerting Protocol (CAP) as the basis for the
>HazCollect system, an NWS initiative in
>partnership with the Federal Emergency
>Management Agency. We also want to address an
>anticipated far reaching problem with the system in its current form.
>As you may know, HazCollect enables federal,
>state and local emergency managers to
>automatically forward Non-Weather Emergency
>Messages into the NOAA All-Hazard Radio network
>and other NOAA public dissemination systems.
>
>I would also break the current second paragraph
>into at least two paragraphs, breaking with the
>sentence that starts: "Deviation...."
>
>Regards,
>Rex
>
>At 10:46 AM -0500 6/16/06, Elysa Jones wrote:
>>TC Members,
>>
>>Patti and I have worked on the NOAA letter
>>which is attached. Please review as soon as
>>possible. I would like to have a telecon to
>>accept any final comments and approve the
>>letter with a quorum this afternoon if
>>possible. Please try to be available for a
>>very short call at 3:00EDT. Reply to the list
>>if can make this. Thank you, Elysa
>>
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