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Re: [emergency] NOAA Letter and meeting today a 3:00 EDT

  • 1.  Re: [emergency] NOAA Letter and meeting today a 3:00 EDT

    Posted 06-16-2006 16:45
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    Subject: Re: [emergency] NOAA Letter and meeting today a 3:00 EDT


    Thanks Elysa,
    
    I am available today for the call.
    
    I think the first paragraph is a bit disjointed. 
    I think the second sentence should not be one 
    long sentence, but two shorter ones. Also the 
    last sentence does not seem to belong with the 
    paragraph's overall thought and sounds like 
    something I would expect the addressee (along 
    with whomever else we are addressing by 
    implication) to know. I think it should be a 
    separate short paragraph. I suggest:
    
    I am writing on behalf of the Emergency 
    Management Technical Committee (EMTC) of the 
    Organization for the Advancement of Structured 
    Information Standards (OASIS). We would like to 
    commend your staff for utilizing the Common 
    Alerting Protocol (CAP) as the basis for the 
    HazCollect system, an NWS initiative in 
    partnership with the Federal Emergency Management 
    Agency. We also want to address an anticipated 
    far reaching problem with the system in its 
    current form.
    
    As you may know, HazCollect enables federal, 
    state and local emergency managers to 
    automatically forward Non-Weather Emergency 
    Messages into the NOAA All-Hazard Radio network 
    and other NOAA public dissemination systems.
    
    I would also break the current second paragraph 
    into at least two paragraphs, breaking with the 
    sentence that starts: "Deviation...."
    
    Regards,
    Rex
    
    At 10:46 AM -0500 6/16/06, Elysa Jones wrote:
    >TC Members,
    >
    >Patti and I have worked on the NOAA letter which 
    >is attached.  Please review as soon as possible. 
    >I would like to have a telecon to accept any 
    >final comments and approve the letter with a 
    >quorum this afternoon if possible.  Please try 
    >to be available for a very short call at 
    >3:00EDT.  Reply to the list if can make this. 
    >Thank you, Elysa
    >
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